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Pilot Pick-Up Review (ABC) – 2011-2012 Season

Development season is right now, and with the scripts picked to pilot about to be shot, the next best thing besides watching the finished product is reading them. As well as reviewing them. I’ll also venture a guess as to whether I think they’ll go to series or not (all of which is announced as usual at the Upfronts). So here goes.

Let’s start with ABC, land of the soap and female viewership.
This season, they’re definitely trying to go a little more male-skewing while cashing in on the family comedy genre. With Lost now gone and Desperate Housewives winding down, they’re also on the lookout for the next big high-concept drama.

Dramas (One-hour)
Georgetown (Will Fetters)
Logline: A soapy dramatic series about the young political careerists living together in DC who are just learning the ropes and need to find the balance between idealism and reality.
With: Daisy Betts, Katie Cassidy, Joe Mazzello, Condola Rashad, Jimmy Wolk
My thoughts:
When you think about a political show, your mind goes straight to The West Wing. Here again, Georgetown is a tough sell as a stand-alone show.
It takes more than half of the pilot to get used to the idea that, no, Sorkin isn’t coming to the rescue and, yes, these are indeed 20-something youngsters apparently running the political capital of the country.
As expected, the show is heavily soapy, but this is fortunately no CW show (we’re a long way from Gossip Girl territory). By the end of it, you can see why ABC picked it. Now, whether it’s…
Going to series? Yes. Joss Schwartz (who’s an exec on the project) is now a known commodity, and with the 2012 election right around the corner, everyone’s waiting for a political show to pop up (that isn’t going to fail like ABC’s last try, Commander in Chief).

Good Christian Bitches (Robert Harling)
Logline:A dramatic series with comedic elements based on the book of the same name by Kim Gatlin. The series centers on a woman with two children who tries to start over by moving back to the wealthy Dallas enclave where she grew up after the death of her disgraced husband. Now living with her overbearing mother, she remembers that she left for a reason, because her old “friends” are ready to sabotage her with gossip and worse. It doesn’t help that she wasn’t exactly an angel in her youth. She turns to her true allies and faith to get her through.
With: Jennifer Aspen, Leslie Bibb, Kristin Chenoweth, Marisol Nichols, Annie Potts, Miriam Shor
My thoughts:
If any project is striving to be a Desperate Housewives replacement, this is the one.
Disappointingly, the pilot wasn’t as strong as its predecessor. Whereas Housewives succeeded in bringing, both, the serious drama and the funny comedy, Good Christian Bitches barely scratches the surface.
Ultimately, Christian Bitches is to Housewives what The Talk is to The View. Get from that what you will. And about that not-so-provocative title? You can bet they’ll change it.
Going to series? Yes, but… Is ABC confident enough in Desperate Housewives to carry over a few more seasons, or do they want a new ensemble soap right now? Plus controversy is always welcome.

Hallelujah (Marc Cherry)
Logline: A dramatic series set in the small town of Hallelujah, Tennessee in which the forces of good and evil are personified by two men. One is hard-working diner owner who’s had a run of tragic luck and the other is a corrupt and immoral millionaire. When it appears evil is winning the battle, a mysterious newcomer arrives in town and things start looking more optimistic for “good.”
With: Arielle Kebbel, Donal Logue, Jesse L Martin, Frances O’Connor, Terry O’Quinn
My thoughts:
I came in expecting nothing, I came out not only liking the pilot but anticipating the series.
Some people may call me crazy for comparing Hallelujah to it, but I got a strong The Stand-like vibe from the show.
The way Cherry weaves religion/faith into the story, and how everything quietly builds up to a battle between good and evil in the purest sense is definitely reminiscent of the Stephen King classic.
I don’t want to spoil too much about either The Stand or Hallelujah, but I thoroughly enjoyed this world.
Overall, it is eons more intriguing than, say, Happy Town, which was much more a Twin Peaks wannabe than Cherry’s project is.
Going to series? Yes. Solid cast, solid writer, solid story. And it’s Marc Cherry’s highly anticipated new project.

Identity (John Glenn)
Logline: A dramatic series based on the UK ITV series centering on an elite team that investigates identity thieves. The detectives are chasing electronic footprints – surveillance camera footage, parking tickets, credit card purchases – looking for impostors who can be anyone they want.
With: Angela Bassett, Orlando Jones, Wentworth Miller, Colin O’Donoghue, Jay Paulson
My thoughts:
Very classic procedural (which I’m not a fan of generally). Main case is well thought-out but the execution of the premise feels somewhat tame. The protagonist is borderline unlikeable and the visual style is pretty much a copy of all modern CBS procedurals.
I’m somewhat skeptic about the longevity of the show. It’s one thing to come up with six stories about identity theft, but 22 original ones? Ouch.
Going to series? Maybe. Recognizable name in the cast, based on existing property, and ABC wants a more male-skewing procedural. Are those criteria good enough to warrant a series order?

Once Upon a Time (Adam Horowitz/Eddie Kitsis)
Logline: A dramatic series set in the small town of Storybrooke, Maine, where all of the characters in Fairy Tale Land have been in exile, following an epic battle between Good and Evil, which Evil won. Only a ten year old boy knows the truth; everyone else in the town is under the spell of the Evil Queen, who has erased their memories of their past glories. The boy escapes and finds his birth mother, who is the daughter of Snow White and Prince Charming, and together they work to topple the evil queen.
With: Robert Carlyle, Joshua Dallas, Jamie Dornan, Jared Gilmore, Ginnifer Goodwin, Jennifer Morrison, Lana Parrilla, Raphael Sbarge
My thoughts:
Mixing the fairy tale and real world in a serious (i.e. for adults) way is a novel and interesting concept. I really enjoyed the execution. Sure, they’re taking a heavy cue from Lost by alternating two timelines (“past” fairy tale world with “present” modern day), but it works. I can definitely see them going even further and focusing each episode on a given fairy tale character (with flashbacks).
I’m very curious as to how they can make some of the characters work on screen without seeming ridiculous (e.g. Jiminy Cricket). Wait & See.
Going to series? Yes. Highly anticipated premise and top notch cast. (Assuming the SFX don’t fall flat on their face).

Pan Am (Jack Orman)
Logline: A period dramatic series centering on flight attendants for cutting-edge new clipper on Pan American World Airways in the mid-1960’s. It’s the dawn of the space age, but on board, the crew deal with various crises, from love affairs to a bit of international espionage.
With: Kelli Garner, Jonah Lotan, Michael Mosley, Christina Ricci, Margot Robbie
My thoughts:
Mad Men definitely made the 60s look sexy (male-wise), and now Pan Am is striving to do the same with women. With a historical twist.
Indeed, unlike its AMC rival, we get a deeper look into the Cold War era with, for instance, some good Cuba espionage storylines (although no Alias-worthy action). Don’t worry, it isn’t as ridiculous as it sounds. You still get the ABC vibe (i.e. soap elements), but it’s a solid historical drama.
Plus the fact that an episode is set in a given flight is pretty cool. And of course, you have flashbacks (organic and compelling ones, I promise).
Going to series? Why not. In so many ways is this not an ABC show, but I still think it has a shot (mainly thanks to Ricci’s presence).

Partners (Ed Bernero)
Logline: A dramatic series centering on two half sisters, Jess and Mattie, who are also police partners and work as a team to take down criminals, manage their personal lives, and deal with the boy’s club at work. The coolly rational Jess seems like the caregiver for her hotheaded younger sibling, but she is actually covering up a terrible secret in her past, a secret she is anxious Mattie never learns.
With: Michael Beach, Frances Fisher, Larry Gilliard, Jr., Kenneth Mitchell, Scottie Thompson, Annie Wersching
My thoughts:
The ABC version of a cop procedural. Need I say more?
You also have an overbearing voice-over. Actually two of them (the sisters), which gets even more confusing once the action starts to roll in.
Going to series? Depends. The only reason ABC would pick it up is if they plan to play it safe, and if this pilot list is any indication, that’s not what they want to do.

Poe (Chris Hollier)
Logline: A dramatic series centering on writer and early detective Edgar Allan Poe, who investigates strange mysteries in the Boston of the 1840’s, with a contemporary and fun tone. Poe is a reporter who also helps the police investigate difficult cases. He’s smart, charming and sometimes irreverent, and doesn’t rule out the paranormal when solving crimes.
With: Christopher Egan, Tabrett Bethell, Natalie Dormer, Kevin McNally, Leslie Odom Jr.
My thoughts:
Is this Sherlock Holmes (2009): The TV Show? Pretty much.
Still, you’ve got to give props for developing what some might consider a niche show, but is actually much more universal. The mysteries (and techniques employed) end up being almost timeless, and so do the characters. It may be another modernization of classics, but it’s done so well that you can’t complain. Fans of Poe will also be delighted with the many visual shout-outs.
Going to series? Possibly. ABC might want to try something new by picking this up, and with Sherlock Holmes having a sequel released, the timing is perfect.

Revenge (Mike Kelley)
Logline: A dramatic series centering on a young woman whose family is disgraced when her father is framed and sent to prison for a white collar financial crime he didn’t commit, which led to his death. As a result, she went from living in the lap of luxury in the Hamptons to foster care. Years later, in her twenties, she returns to the wealthy enclave where it went down under an assumed identity to get revenge on each and every one of those responsible.
With: Ashley Madekwe, Gabriel Mann, Connor Paolo, Emily VanCamp, Nick Wechsler II
My thoughts:
A revenge drama reminiscent of the Count of Monte Cristo. It’s grandiose, it’s epic, and it’s a soap. What more could ABC ask?
Going to series? Maybe. It’s a crowded field for soaps this ABC season and this one might not be different enough. Although the fact that the story can be close-ended (a la mini series) might push it for mid-season/early summer

The River (Michael J. Green/Michael R. Perry)
Logline: A dramatic series shot in a documentary style centering on a famous television naturalist who is lost and presumed dead while on an adventure in the Amazon. Believing he is still alive, a group of his loyal friends, led by his reluctant medical student son, assemble a rescue mission. But something deadly in the river awaits.
With: Joe Anderson, Paul Blackthorne, Bruce Greenwood, Leslie Hope, Eloise Mumford, Sean Parks
My thoughts:
I’d like to preface this by stating that I’m not a fan of Oren Peli. It will therefore come as a shock to no one that I didn’t like this pilot, at all.
For me, a standard Peli drama (Paranormal Activity, Area 51) is a) done in mockumentary style, b) 85% of nothing happening, c) 15% of build-up, and d) no pay-off. Lo and behold, The River is exactly that.
And it’s another Lost rip-off. You’ve got a weird monster roaming around, you’ve got flashbacks right in the middle of (supposedly) intense moments, and a mysterious island/jungle of sorts. The stakes and mysteries are borderline uninteresting, and the characters are almost unlikable.
Going to series? Yes. ABC wants a new Lost as quickly as possible. Not that such a thing exists but if they want to try, so be it.

Multi-camera Comedies (Half-hour)
The Last Days of Man (Jack Burditt)
Logline: A multi-camera family comedy series centering on a man who is fighting for his manhood while surrounded by a world of women.
With: Tim Allen
My thoughts:
I’ll say it: I thought the script was misogynistic. What is Tim Allen doing?
Main character is unlikeable (if not despicable), and the humor is pretty much tired.
Also, a multi-cam on ABC? What?
Going to series? Maybe. Tim Allen is the only reason this show would get picked up.

Work It (Ted Cohen/Andrew Reich)
Logline: A multi-camera comedy series centering on two men who find success as sales reps for a pharmaceutical company when they do the job dressed as women.
With: John Caparulo, Ben Koldyke, Rebecca Mader, Amaury Nolasco
My thoughts:
What the hell was that?
Hands-down the worst of the pilots on this list.
The script is plain unfunny, and not right for ABC at all. The transvestite storyline is not only plain weird in this context, but it’s also doubtful they can make it believable for an episode (let alone an entire season).
Going to series? I hope not.

Single-camera Comedies (Half-hour)
Bad Mom (Sharon Horgan)
Logline: A single camera comedy series centering on a “bad mom,” who has relied on her own mother to raise her kids. When her mom decides to reclaim her life, she has to get her act together and be a real parent.
With: Jenna Elfman, Sharon Horgan
My thoughts:
Cute comedy, but overall forgettable. Sadly there’s nothing outstanding about it.
Going to series? Possibly. I can see it as a mid-season show that never finds a real audience.

Don’t Trust the Bitch in Apt. 23 (Nahnatchka Khan)
Logline: A single camera comedy series about a sweet girl from the heartland who moves to New York City and her roommate is a slightly crazy, sexy party girl.
With: Michael Blaiklock, Krysten Ritter, James Van Der Beek, Dreama Walker
My thoughts:
Now that’s an edgy comedy for broadcast.
The meta elements of Van Der Beek playing Van Der Beek might go over the head of some of the viewers but we know who ABC is really targeting with this.
Going to series? Yes please?

Man Up! (Christopher Moynihan)
Logline: A single camera comedy series centering on a happily married father of two who struggles with his identity as a modern, sensitive, hand sanitizer using guy versus his father and grandfather, “real” men who were war veterans. He commiserates with his two male best friends and struggles to be a role model for his own son.
With: Amanda Detmer, Dan Fogler, Christopher Moynihan, Teri Polo, Henry Simmons, Mather Zickel
My thoughts:
If you wanted an example of a more ABC male-skewing comedy, this is it. For one, it reminded me a little of FX’s The League (which is a good thing), with this “boys club” kind of vibe. Nothing groundbreaking here though.
Going to series? Doubtful. Slate is pretty full in regards to family comedy and Moynihan is under an ABC Studios deals so, if it isn’t this one, then the next.

My Freakin’ Family (Erica Rivinoja)
Logline: A single camera comedy series about a young couple who have to fight for their role in their baby’s life when each of their parents, who are all from varied cultural backgrounds, descend upon them.
With: Mo Gaffney, Harish Patel, Ravi Patel, Christopher Rich, Cybill Shepherd, Ellen Woglom
My thoughts:
Another try at cashing in on Modern Family, this time with more of an Outsourced take. Sadly, the jokes are pretty tired, the story is boring, and the parents are unlikeable. Thanks but no thanks.
Going to series? Same as above.

Suburgatory (Emily Kapnek)
Logline: A single camera comedy series centering on a teen girl whose quality of life takes a nose dive when her family moves from the big city to the suburbs.
With: Carly Chaikin, Allie Grant, Cheryl Hines, Jane Levy, Jeremy Sisto, Alan Tudyk
My thoughts:
Yes, it was funny and the characters were quirky enough for me to care. I can definitely see it in the Cougar Town/The Middle block. Add in Tudyk and Sisto and I’m already sold.
Going to series? I hope so.

Next up in the broadcast world is CBS.

Kill your babies!

So there’s this writer who’s trying to break an episode.
He’s spending every waking hours thinking about it.
Suddenly, this brilliant scene comes to mind. And, ‘oh my God!, I finally found a way of putting in that great catchphrase! It fits so perfectly!’
From breaking it, the writer moves on to actually penning the script.
As always, everything continues to evolve. Characters grow, scenes get trimmed, dialogues get sharper.
Except for that one brilliant scene with the great catchphrase. It sticks with the script no matter the context. Even during the rewrite, and despite everyone telling him how problematic the scene is, ‘I can’t bring myself to remove that brilliant scene with that great catchphrase. It’s so iconic, it transcends storytelling, or acts. You don’t get it.’

Sounds familiar?

If that writer were to step back, he’d see how obvious it is that nor the scene or the catchphrase have their place in the script anymore. (And actually they’re not as groundbreaking as he thinks they are)
These words are his babies. And if he’s not willing to kill them now, they’ll kill his work later.

We all have them in our scripts. Great ideas/scenes/lines/characters that were so inspiring at the moment of their creation that we can’t even think about ending their existence. You know the ones.
They have quite literally become our babies, our children. We feed them our excuses for keeping them in the script, even though deep down we know they don’t serve any purpose.
The more you let them hang around, the more you grow attached to them, the less you want to delete them, and the more you let them hang around.

If there’s one lesson from the Lost finale to be had, it’s this one: you need to let go and move on.
Take a harsh look at your script and be ready to make some sacrifices in slashing your words.

So what can you do to ease the pain?
I hate deleting my words as much as the next guy.
Subconsciously (or maybe I’m plain aware of this), I think that if I cut something out of the script, it’s gone forever.
To eliminate the doubt I have a ‘limbo file‘, a separate text document where I cut/paste into it all the stuff I’m removing from the script.
This is certainly not the greatest idea ever. It’s not organized, and actually it’s pretty random. But at the back of my mind, I’m somewhat comforted by the fact that if push comes to shove, I can always find again the things I deleted.
Truth is though, I will never open this file to read back my aborted content, but it does the trick since the words are gone from the finished product.
What this ‘limbo file’ allows me to do is cut the BS, and more importantly move on with the work.

Those kinds of scenes you think are vital but are not were never meant to be permanent.
Yes, even if you can’t consciously realize it.
At best, they were like crutches; supporting your other beats until you found a better solution.
At worst, they were buoys sent by your wondrous mind to keep you afloat and avoid getting script-stuck forever.

As a wise man once said (paraphrase alert): be attached to the meaning of your words, not the words themselves.

Your sentiments are keeping you from growing, evolving, shielding your skin (perplexing imagery, I know).
It is time for you to take a step forward and embrace changes in your script.
After all, we’re talking about a rewrite; and that doesn’t come without a few pains.

So whether you need a ‘limbo file’ or not, do yourself and your work a favor: kill your babies.

Born to Run (Emmys 2010)

Already another award show?
It’s as if time isn’t standing still anymore.
Unlike when you’re stuck watching an award show. Badum-ching.

For once, the opening Emmy number was good (surprisingly). It was also a nice big ad for FOX’s Glee…on NBC.
I do have one major caveat though: Jimmy Fallon, please stop singing.
I mean it.
We could all tell you had a hard time catching your breath and you were pretty much completely off-cue during the live part of the song.
I do wonder why they didn’t use Auto-Tune like Simon Cowell.

The best moments of the night didn’t come from Fallon (as expected, like the Conan jokes), but from Neil Patrick Harris, Ricky Gervais, and even a clip featuring the Modern Family cast discussing ‘options’ with a fake suit.

The running-gag of Twitter jokes was as bad as that time we had reality presenters as actual hosts of the Emmys. Remember?
You shouldn’t be scarce on jokes when you’re hosting an award ceremony, that is all.

There were several awkward moments during the night, especially with some presenters. The first one coming to mind is the Matthew Perry/Lauren Graham duo that epicly bombed.
That was soon followed by John Krasinski forgetting his lines–even though the teleprompter was right in front of him.
Awkward.

This year was also the year of popular vote it seems, with lots of newcomers and fan faves winning. Jane Lynch, Jim Parsons, Eric Stonestreet, Aaron Paul, you name it.
And, yes, Bryan Cranston did deserve to win again!
I’m however sorry to point out that Eddie Falco was not the best choice as Lead Actress in a Comedy. She even admitted it herself.


Still nothing new under the sun regarding the Best Drama-type categories, which brings me to this now-popular joke: Will Erin Levy get fired for winning an Emmy? *rimshot*

Lost didn’t win anything.
I find it sad that Darlton actually used as their Emmy joke a true anecdote showing how poorly planned their mythology was. Though that’s old news by now surely.

It’s funny that the Emmy peeps recycled last year’s bottom-screen announcement, such as ‘George Clooney in 17 minutes’ or ‘True Blood cast in 21 minutes.’
I mean really?
Is that what people watched the show for, or is NBC that desperate to get eyeballs?
Funny to think that the cast of True Blood is also seemingly as popular as Clooney.
At least this year they didn’t pull out the ‘In Memoriam in 30 seconds‘ card.

Oh well.
At least a deserving series won for Best Comedy.