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The Failings of Breaking Bad

Much has been said about Breaking Bad over the past few months. Virtually all praise. As a matter of fact, I adore the show (hence this entire week of articles).
Before we get to the adulation and deconstruction of why this is such a ground-breaking show, I thought it was important to at least talk about some of the (few) problems it has. This isn’t needless bashing, as I’m not here to denigrate the oft-lauded classic traits of the show (e.g. cinematography, directing, montages, etc.). The article is about storytelling points I’ve had issue with.
I’ll be getting pretty critical on some specific aspects of the show in this column, so please don’t get upset. I still love Bad.
Warning: I’ll be talking about everything up to the pre-finale, so beware if you haven’t seen the final season (five).

Hinting at nothing

We’ll see later this week how one of the show’s greatest strengths is to “bathe in the mystery”. However, there has been one occasion of a tease that, not only didn’t payoff in a satisfying manner, but felt like an unnecessary lead on.
I’m of course talking about the season two flashforwards. Before the bearded Walt from season five, we had a black-and-white pool with a pink teddy bear. That damn teddy!

Breaking Bad Pool
As a fervent viewer of the show since day one, that season two buildup was one of the biggest cock-teases in recent TV history. It wasn’t as bad as Lost‘s smoke monster, or Battlestar Galactica‘s Cylon plan, but for a season-long mystery, it was definitely a miniature version.
It may not play out the same now, as you binge-watch the show, but when it came to a weekly viewing, the resolution of such an extended teasing was nothing short of a slap in the face.
To recap the storyline, I’ll quote the Breaking Bad Wiki:

As teasers, they led to the illusion that there had been a tragic event, possibly a meth related explosion at Walter White’s house as authorities in hazmat outfits are seen collecting personal effects and placing them in evidence bags along other damaged items. Amongst the items are a pair of eyeglasses similar to Walter’s. Adding to the illusion that a fire was involved, a scorched pink teddy bear, the main focus of each teaser, is the only item seen in color. An overhead shot of Walt’s Pontiac Aztek with a damaged front windshield and emergency personnel in hazmat outfits close the zipper on a pair of white body bags. The shot pans upwards and fades into a full color wide shot depicting two large pillars of black smoke that are billowing in the distance behind Walt’s house. The teasers actually depict the aftermath of the mid-air collision of a Boeing 737 commercial airliner, Wayfarer 515 and a chartered plane.

(Fun fact: the episodes with the flahforwards have their combined titles spell out “Seven Thirty-Seven Down Over ABQ”.)

Four years ago, I talked about how binge-watching serialized shows virtually erases any viewer frustration from dead-ends or poorly planned plotlines. But this isn’t exactly the same.
Ironically, season two of Breaking Bad was the only one completely planned-out from the get-go, as the writers were breaking stories. I say ironically in that the conclusion was so ridiculously irrelevant and pointless that one could have made it up on the spot. Yes, I’m already aware of the symbolic behind the dramatic “crash”. I’m talking about how it (doesn’t) serve the storytelling itself.
Had there been no flashforwards, perhaps this wouldn’t be an issue in the first place. Yet the writers made a deliberate decision of having these teasers hinting at something bigger. And it ended up being a “gotcha!” moment.
Again, I understand the point of the final scene, but what I don’t really understand is why the peppered flashforwards were needed throughout the season. It’s as if they didn’t trust that their already-compelling narrative would be enough to sustain a week-to-week viewing. I don’t need a hook to watch a Breaking Bad episode.

Spoiling and treading

Hands-down, my single biggest issue with the entire run of Breaking Bad is the first half of season five, aka the first half of the final season.
And it all starts with another egregious use of a flashforward: the opening of 5×01 (“Live Free or Die”).
Like the pool flashforwards from season two, it seems the writers were attempting at teasing towards something consequential happening in the near future of the show (albeit this time with an actual payoff — the end).
Unlike the “crashforwards” that didn’t lead to anything, this latest example actually reveals too much. I had (almost) nothing negative to say about the show, up until that damn opening.

Breaking Bad Future Walt
A 52-year-old Walter White Lambert enters a Denny’s to buy a “say hello to my little friend” machine gun. New identity. No wedding ring. Back on meds. Alone.
In the span of four minutes, the show has already spoiled to its audience how it ends. A full year and fifteen episodes in advance.
As soon as I saw that 5×01 opening, I was afraid that they were showing us what amounted to the series finale (or what came right before it). They had spent a single year (in-world) on five seasons, and the flashforward occurred a further year after that. In other words, it didn’t seem like they would have time to cover such an amount in just a few episodes.
I was hoping I was wrong, that they would get to that point by the half-season. They didn’t.
I compare it to this “what if” scenario in Battlestar Galactica (spoiler alert): if season 4 (final season; also cut in half) had started with a flashforward of the BSG crew on the second Earth (i.e. the green pastures from the series finale), then their arrival would have been devoid of its emotional impact (at least most of it).
Same thing with Breaking Bad. You could easily connect the dots, from his cancer returning, to him using Saul’s disappearer from the fourth season, the loss of his family, and his revenge kick.

Even worse, they spent the entire half-season around a tertiary plotline (Madrigal/Vamonos Pest), which had virtually nothing to do with the overarching series stakes in Walter White’s story (especially after that flashforward).
To go back to my BSG analogy, had the show used the Green Earth flashforward, the first half of the season would have felt like a waste of time, and fans would have been pissed. “Who cares about this fake/desolate grey Earth? I want to get to the real one you showed us!”
Despite four Breaking Bad seasons of great pacing, that first half of season five was almost complete filler. For the first time, Breaking Bad was stalling.

The “point” of that half-season was to get Walt to quit his empire business, which is something they could have spent several episodes on, instead of just one montage in the mid-season finale (see time management). I also “get” that there’s an overall point about Heisenberg’s blue legacy, and I’m sure the finale will echo that sentiment (perhaps around its final scenes). That doesn’t mean half of the final season needed to be served as buildup for this single purpose. There are just so many more rewarding stories that could have been told or expanded in those eight episodes.
Mike died at the end, but a more impactful climax would have been something involving Hank’s demise (transposing his pursuit of Walt from the back-eight to the first half). Between some “legacy costs” subplot introduced a season ago, versus four seasons of built-in rivalry between two brothers, which one has more weight for eight episodes? It was never about Hank vs. Walt, but given how small that storyline ended up being in the last few episodes, it’s the kind of plotline that deserved of a full half-season (especially given all the build-up and anticipation).

Time management

One year. That’s how long (in-world) the show has lasted, at least until the fifth season.
As we’ve seen, if there’s something problematic with Breaking Bad, it is how it (sometimes) handles time. Sadly, this doesn’t stop with flashforwards.
Of course, this is TV, so I’m not really bitching about “so many things happen in just a year”. My real problem stems from the way the show has portrayed time.
If not for the 51st birthday bacon platter, would we even realize five seasons of the show only comprised one year?

BreakingBad 51st Birthday
I’ve been loving this final half of season five, however my timely issues seem to be creeping back up as we reach that flashforward moment. Namely, in 5×15 (“Granite State”), as Walter White, under his new identity, is “safely” tucked away in his New Hampshire cabin. In the episode comes probably the biggest time-jump in the show’s history (about six months). We come back in Act 3 and notice Walt’s aging (thanks to his hair and beard). The problem is that this passage of time isn’t felt or even seen.
In fact, I would say that out of Breaking Bad‘s multiple “passage of time” moments, this one is probably the most important. This is, after all, the one where we catch up to the aforementioned flashforwards (from 5×01 and 5×09).
Regardless of how easy or not it was to “guess” what happened to Walt, the transition (both physical and emotional) from his Heisenberg character of five seasons to this dwindling old man is the crux of these final episode. And yet, we barely see any of it. This seems to be another case of compelling drama, hinted at by the storytelling, that is never paid off. The devolution is never shown.

This kind of goes against the many “time flies” montages, most notably the (now-classic) “Crystal Blue Persuasion” from 5×08 (“Gliding Over All”), which was there to establish Walt’s retirement. In the pre-series-finale, he’s learning all these things about his family (e.g. Skyler changing career, house in auction, etc.), and it’s tearing him apart. Almost all of it is implied (or said by Robert Forster in one-liners). Breaking Bad has always been a show about the moments between the moments. This is the kind of drama it should be showing instead of telling.
You could argue that there are only two episodes left, so you can’t spend too much time on that. But we just covered the fact that the first half of season five was a lot of filler. If you move forward the Hank storyline to Season 5A, then you’ve got 5B to cover Walt’s downfall (instead of a single episode). Although we’re not making Breaking Bad fan-fiction here, so I’ll stop talking about hypotheticals.
Bottom line is the episode should make you feel like six (or more) months have passed. There’s virtually no indication of that, as we’re only being told what happened to Skylar et al. It feels like a great disservice for something that is: 1) centered on the most important characters, 2) hinted at with two “wait for it” flashforwards, and 3) an integral part of the end run of the show. I understand there’s no point in showing Saul’s wacky adventures, but even a montage of the Whites in New Mexico would not have detracted from the emotional toll of Walt’s isolation.

Ever since Lost “mainstreamed” the storytelling device, plenty of shows have used and abused flashforwards. Breaking Bad is just the latest on the list.
Fortunately, the show won’t be remembered for these failures, as we’ll see in the next few posts.

“Why Star Trek?” – The State of an Enduring Franchise

Click Here For Part I – Presenting Star Trek: Terran

One of the ideas behind Terran is to continue the ongoing discussion about the future of Star Trek.
Over the past few months, there has been a growing number of people clamoring for a new series. The sheer amount of articles on the subject is staggering. I can even link every word in this sentence to a different one. There is a need for it to come back to television.

It may seem self-evident to fans of the franchise that Star Trek should be brought back to TV, but I feel there are many more reasons for why (beyond being reactionary towards the reboot). There is a rationale to why having a new Trek series is important. Some of it even ties directly to why I wanted to make Terran in the first place. And it all boils down to one question: Why Star Trek?

The Need for Star Trek

It has been over eight years since the last original episode of a Star Trek series aired on television.
In that time, the TV landscape has evolved. A lot of dramas that have popped up, especially genre, aim for “dark and gritty” (I’ll get to that in a minute).

Yet, now more than ever, there is a dire need for Star Trek to come back to its true episodic roots. To come back as a series.
Terran is my vision for such a show, but beyond that, it is about what I think is currently missing on TV: science-fiction with a purpose.
One of the most interesting trait of the genre has always been that it could serve as an echo of reality. And the world desperately needs a reflection of itself.
You could make a pretty long list of contemporary issues that are begging to be explored (surveillance, social class, role of government, etc.). These are issues that would still be prevalent within the Trek-verse. In fact, the franchise has always been great at taking on societal and moral issues throughout its series (some more contemporary than others).

Even more importantly, Star Trek endures because it always has been forward-looking.
Star Trek stands for hope. Reaching for the sky and going where no one has gone before. It is sending a positive outlook about people. A better humanity, united, and equal. We need Star Trek on TV to inspire society, but also a new generation, people growing up to be explorers in their fields. This is about believing in a better future and striving to better ourselves.

We need a new Star Trek series, not for the fans of the franchise, but for everybody else. We need it for the bigger picture.

Realism in Star Trek

A popular trend nowadays is to do fiction that is “dark and gritty“.
Since those somber works are often concerned with keeping a realistic approach, the tone has wrongfully become synonymous with “realism”.
The truth is that this spectrum is closer to being a grid. Like this one:

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Battlestar Galactica is a “realistic” science-fiction show that is also dark. But it starts off with a genocide.
Would gritty really suit a Star Trek series? I don’t think so. Star Trek is set in an idealistic future. Simply put, it isn’t in its DNA (at least from the outset).
Star Trek Renegades, as I previously put it, is an ‘awkwardly bleak’ web-series. It tries to stick the “dark & gritty” trend on the franchise, without it making much sense. The concept of Tuvok and Chekov going rogue seems out of place, especially given how honorable the characters were in their respective series.
Even Deep Space 9 was not actually that bleak. It was merely realistic about the world around it. It wasn’t meant to devalue the values and ideals of the series, it was meant to bring nuances to a previously “black and white” universe.

io9 recently put out an editorial asking that the new Trek movies do not “pull a DS9”, making it synonymous with having meaningless bleakness. Incorrectly so. DS9 is about bringing a sense of realism to the franchise.
In the Pale Moonlight is perhaps DS9’s, and Star Trek‘s darkest hour, but it is that way in spite of the world it is set in. Sisko didn’t reach “that point” for the sake of it (or because moral dilemmas are cool). We reached this dark moment out of necessity. (I won’t spoil what I’m exactly talking about for people who haven’t seen the episode yet.) In fact, DS9 is labeled as a much darker show than its counterpart, but I partly disagree with that assessment. The Next Generation, Voyager and Enterprise all had their dark moments. The difference is that DS9 dealt with serious issues that sometimes led to morally ambiguous decisions that stayed with the show. Picard turning into a Borg, causing the deaths of countless people, had almost no real consequences in the long run of TNG. And let’s not even get started on Janeway (or Tuvix).
What made DS9 such a stark contrast in the Trek universe were the consequences for actions previously undertaken. There wasn’t a reset button. It was life (and death). A decade before BSG and Lost, and over fifteen years before Game of Thrones or Breaking Bad.

All of this is to say that Star Trek has been grim, but dark & gritty isn’t the default. The characters are not amoral, and neither is the world.
Star Trek: Terran fits with the DS9 sensibility of realism, without trying to be “dark and gritty”. Hope and realism are not mutually exclusive.
The Original Series had a certain sense of naiveté about blissful hope that the latter series tried to shed (or at least address). Different sensibilities, different times.
One of the ideas behind Terran is to be realistic, but not depressing. Nobody is singing Kumbaya on Earth. The Federation, the United Earth and Starfleet are not perfect. And just because humanity has outgrown doesn’t mean that a post-scarcity world isn’t without issues (if only from outside). Yet Star Trek is still a hopeful future. It is people working to attain ideals greater than themselves.

Writing Star Trek

The current state of the franchise is simple: the Powers That Be have no plans to produce a new Star Trek series in the near future.
There are multiple issues at play, not the least of which is rights issues. Currently, CBS owns the production rights to any new Star Trek series, while Paramount Pictures owns the Star Trek films. Memory Alpha actually has a pretty decent history of corporate ownership.

With all that in mind, I decided to put my time where my mind was, and spec my own take of a new Trek series. Terran. Not because it could be produced, but because it needed to be proven. This is, after all, still a proof of concept.
The idea was to advance the conversation on why and how Star Trek can be brought back to TV. There are ways of creating a fresh, original, new take on this universe, while meeting current TV industry standards.
In the age of serialized storytelling, it seems unthinkable for a potential science-fiction series to revert to decade-old formulas of stand-alone adventures in space. This mold won’t work. I want Terran to be a return to the proper roots of the franchise (less mindless explosions, more story), with modern storytelling (I’ve already dissected the concept of the show in more details). All while still being accessible to people who may not know much about the franchise.

So, what exactly is in the future of Star Trek? I’ve just offered you my vision with Terran. Maybe you can tell me yours.
Together, we can rally around bringing the franchise back to television. We can share our views on why a show is needed, and discuss what exactly it can be.
The Star Trek franchise will endure as long as you want it to. Let it live on!

Download the pilot script (.PDF)

Click Here For Part III – “Breaking Rules”: Speccing and Sharing Star Trek: Terran

Star Trek: Terran

After a lot of teasing, the mystery script project is finally revealed. Enjoy!

Just to get that out of the way: this is not a Kickstarter, crowd-funding or other monetary “fan project”.

What is Star Trek: Terran all about?
There is, currently, an ever-growing discussion about Star Trek, and especially the future of the franchise.
As a fan, I thought it was finally time to advance that discussion.
Specifically, I wanted to bring to the table a realistic way Star Trek could be brought back to TV. Not a fan-fiction, and not a web-series (or combinations thereof).
I ended up writing a 1-hour original spec pilot off that idea, which I am now posting online. No strings attached.

Terran is what, I believe, a new Star Trek show HAS to be: a fresh take on the franchise.
This is not a generic “re-imagining” or general reboot/remake/sequel.
It is my version of a viable modern Star Trek series, trying to work within the realities of the mythology and television industry.

The show is also supposed (and meant) to be accessible to everyone, including non-Trekkies.
If you’re at least sci-fi curious, you’re more than welcomed to partake in the script reading. The more the merrier!

I don’t consider Terran to be a pitch, nor do I expect it to be actually made by anyone any time soon.
It’s an experiment. A proof of concept.

Over the next couple of days, I’ll delve even more into the project through two additional posts.
One about the state of the Star Trek franchise, and the other about the writing/spec side of this particular script (and why I chose to post it).

In the meantime, let me finally introduce to you the project.

Download the pilot script (.PDF)

Presenting Star Trek: Terran

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Set in the mid-23rd century, Star Trek: Terran follows the most powerful people in the three most influential branches on Earth:
– The Federation, with the President and his close advisers.
– The United Earth government, via the Prime Minister.
Starfleet, mainly through the Academy and Intelligence, in various echelons.

The World

Terran is a show that aims to be real. It isn’t about the showy tech. It isn’t about the technobabble. It is about a reflection of reality.
Grand ideals and a hopeful outlook, like Star Trek always has been, but with stories closer to The West Wing or Game of Thrones than Stargate SG-1.

The series is grounded figuratively, but not literally. The title doesn’t reflect a location, it represents humanity’s attributes.
At its core, Terran is a story about the exploration of who we are as people. It is about a collection of characters, intertwined in 23rd-century realpolitik and futuristic institutions. Different goals and different values, but all striving towards a prosperous future.

The Characters

It’s always better to discover a character through their portrayal on the page, rather than a simplistic description (especially just off a pilot).
But here’s still a small introduction of each.

The main ensemble cast includes a wide range of people:
President David Kendrick: Commander in chief of the United Federations of Planet. A bold leader that wants to see the best in others.
Prime Minister Zora Guillory: Executive leader of the United Earth government. She wants to protect her people (and planet) as best she can.
Val: Chief of staff for President Kendrick. A Vulcan focused on being extremely proficient at helping the President.
Admiral Barros: The boss of Starfleet Intelligence. Under pressure.
The Deltan: Lieutenant at Starfleet Academy, in charge of Cadet Squadron 47. She also dabbles in extra-curricular activities.
Thelos: A one-antennad Andorian who enjoys telling stories and wearing all-black clothing.
Damien Ellis: Cadet at Starfleet Academy. He likes to think he’s always right (and is).
Kylli Moon: Reporter for the Federation News Network and married to Prime Minister Guillory.
Doctor Richard Daystrom: Works at Starfleet Advanced Technologies. He’s also an old friend of the President (and the only preexisting character on this list).

The Visuals

Since some people reading the Terran pilot won’t be familiar with a few Trek-related visuals (specifically alien races mentioned), I took the liberty of digging up pictures and concept art to better illustrate the Star Trek world. A couple are from the shows, the others are concepts for the two latest Star Trek movies.

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Frequently Asked Questions

Time to answer a few (soon-to-be) common questions about Terran.

Is this yet another “dark and gritty” attempt at a beloved franchise?
Short answer: no. There’s a difference between being realistic, and being dark & gritty.
I’ll go in depth about this very point in tomorrow’s post, but suffice it to say that Terran is not trying to be Battlestar Galactica: Starfleet Edition (or the awkwardly bleak Star Trek Renegades).

Is this set in the Bad Robot/NuTrek-verse?
The Terran pilot works in both the prime or new timeline.
Though if there’s a new Star Trek series made in the coming decade, it will probably be set in the NuTrek-verse.
Yes, I’m saying that in full knowledge of the different TV/movie copyright holders (CBS v. Paramount).

Isn’t the franchise called STAR Trek for a reason? And by reason I mean STARS.
I personally believe the Star Trek franchise is about one thing: exploration.
Whether that literally means exploring the stars, or more metaphorically an exploration of humanity, that’s up to the shows (and, to various degrees, the movies).
After 700+ episodes, I do think that taking the literal concept of a trek throughout the stars is a bit tiring, especially for a “new take”.
Sure, you could do a show in the 25th century. The ships would be sleeker, maybe there’d be a Romulan on board or something. It would basically be “the NEXT next generation”. But it wouldn’t feel new, and would be compared ad nauseam to its 90s counterpart.
One of the reasons the television franchise started to burn out (even before Enterprise) was because of a lack of drive, and novelty factor. There are only so many “reactor failure” stories.
Terran, to me, still fits the above description. It’s ultimately closer to what Deep Space 9 brought to the table: real and (hopefully) interesting situations with a backdrop of human introspection. It’s self-exploration (or self-reflection).

Isn’t Earth a utopia by the 23rd century?
It’s easy to be a saint in Paradise.” – Commander Sisko (DS9 – 2×21)

It is well known that Gene Roddenberry’s uncompromising stance on a utopian version of Earth was a point of dissension and controversy among some of the shows’ writers.
The planet was barely a focal point of The Original Series. The question was more about how “evolved” humanity had become in the future.
By the time the utopian concept was being explored in the latter shows, that vision had already been challenged in the canon. In other words, it was never really explored as faithfully being the utopia. Of course, this very comment is itself a point of dissension among Star Trek fans.

TOS didn’t have to legitimately deal head-on with this vision, so there was no reason to even question it.
DS9, and Enterprise to a different extent, both wanted to explore the cost of this utopia.
And if you think The Next Generation is exempt from this contemplation, take a look at the featured Starfleet admirals on the show. There’s a reason why all of them turn out to be “bad guys”.
It’s the characters that are always striving to keep these ideals.

Maybe there’s a reason why the Earth hasn’t been a focus of Star Trek stories. Midi-chlorians, anyone?
I’d say that the equivalent to the Star Wars “Force” would actually be all the technology used in Trek. Therefore, midi-chlorians = treknobabble.
More importantly, Earth has been used at some point in every Star Trek series. It’s even my opinion that the some of the best and most compelling episodes of the entire franchise are set on Earth (or directly connected to it). Examples include:
The Next Generation: Family/The First Duty (4×02 / 5×19)
Deep Space 9: Homefront/Paradise Lost (4×11 / 4×12)
Voyager: In the Flesh/Pathfinder (5×04 / 6×10)
Enterprise: Demons/Terra Prime (4×20 / 4×21)
This is just the tip of the iceberg.

Terran is is about giving a new perspective on something that has been in the background of Star Trek for nearly half a century.
It is delving, head first, into this part of the universe, (ironically) seldom explored, but fundamental to the entire dynamic of the franchise.

I hope you’ll enjoy, and share your thoughts.

Download the pilot script (.PDF)

Click Here For Part II – “Why Star Trek?”: The State of an Enduring Franchise

Click Here For Part III – “Breaking Rules”: Speccing and Sharing Star Trek: Terran